My first experience with poetry

Dear fellow applicants,

this is the first time I wrote a piece of poetry, and English is not my first language. I hope you pass by it and give me your feed back on the structure, grammar, language and everything. I need it to improve my writings. Your comments are highly appreciated.

here is the link to my piece "Revolting Lubna"
http://worldpulse.com/node/69020

thanks in advance,