BlueSky DR CONGO’s JOURNEY FROM CONFLICTED TO DEVELOPING NATION: The Risk is in the Proposition Really nice work. The one thing I'd like to see more of is a little bit of your voice in between the excellent facts that you quote. This is a great paragraph: The Congolese people, therefore, don’t really expect much from their authorities. As an example, it takes an average of 65 days to get a business license in DR Congo, compared to just 24 hours in neighboring Rwanda. I was at the end of the process and had been at the Registrar’s office for three days waiting for my final document to be printed and officially notarized. The problem was that the electricity had been off for those three days, so the notary couldn’t print the document. Obviously I wasn’t the only one waiting, and so when the mayor happened through the crowded office I confronted him, pleading with him on behalf of all to get the power back on. His reply? “It’s not just here; it’s all over town!” and it really illustrates what you are talking about well -- I'd consider using it to start your piece, and then going into what is currently your first paragraph.